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[Final Fantasy 7 -Remnant-]

Not bad, but could be improved

The animation is decent and the art style shows promise, especially given that it's created within Flash which can prove to be difficult for artists without as much talent.

My only real thing that kept bugging me about this is the fact that the dialogue was poorly done. I'm not talking about the voice recording quality or the voice acting (although I would recommend that in the future you recruit people in SBB via the Voice Actors club to cover some of these roles, because the same person doing all voices is tricky); instead, it's the way the dialogue was written. You had an interesting idea going on, but the dialogue, including the narration, sounded very stereotypical and comic-book-ish, which is a big turnoff to me personally (mostly when Hollywood does it, though). Even if the story is within a fantasy genre, dialogue should be written the way people would say it to each other.

To use an example, if Nanaki was attacked by a remnant of Sephiroth, you don't need 3 characters talking about it like that. Instead, improvise and show the attack happening, but leave the "remnant" idea to mystery for the characters to have to find out.

Two useful keys to screenwriting that I've found by analyzing the work of others is: 1) when it comes to dialogue, pretend you are the character speaking in that setting, and write what you would normally say if you were that kind of person in that kind of setting, and 2) when it comes to knowing what to and what not to show in your production, imagine yourself as a viewer going to the movies to see your film, and ask yourself all throughout your development: "If I was watching my own film as just an average viewer, what would -I- want to see? What would I want to see in this scene? What would I want to see overall?"

Just some food for thought. I usually don't review flashes because many flash artists can take an ounce of criticism, but the reason I felt compelled to review yours is because I can see a lot of potential that just needs some honing.

Good luck in your future endeavors.

SiMpSoN-bRuVaS responds:

wow man thanks for taking all that time to review my flash best review ever xDDDD!!! i know what your saying and will use this to improve my flash work xDDD

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I'm almost insulted that you used my music for this "thing" you call a movie.

Dan90 responds:

i hope you are insulted. its a terrible movie.

[Lost Rhapsody 2]

I agree with the guy who reviewed this before me

You have a natural talent for making flash movies. You artwork (excluding the characters, unless they're your original artwork too) is amazing, but even more amazing is your animating.

So, just why in the hell exactly did you do a Weird Al music video with that kind of talent? This is selling yourself short in the worst way.

I think I speak for everyone here at NG when I say, "We'd love for you to scrap stuff like this and start making original and serious movies. You have so much amazing potential. Please execute it right."

CapnBob responds:

I think you have it backwards. While I have been a long time fan of Weird Al, I'm making Lost music videos and I'm using Weird Al because the variety of different songs he has stitched together is the only thing that could possibly be used to conceptually sum up all the events of an entire season of a tv show.

I am not doing this to join or fit in to any sort of fad or scene. I did the first one as a joke, and I only finished it because I underestimated the amount of work required.

I did the second because people asked for it, because it was a challenge, because it will get me more exposure at this point than something original, AND because I once again severely underestimated how much work would be involved in executing this design.

To think that I am not going to create original works at the first opportunity is shortsighted, and moreso is the claim that you speak for everyone at NG. Perhaps more people will agree with you after my next project which will definitely be my own intellectual property, but popularity is a fickle thing and I'm not going to take it for granted that the audience for the two movies I have released here will all be on board with anything I do next.

That said... What in the world is wrong with making a Weird Al music video?

[Awesome Video Games - Ep2]

Suprisingly not bad

I had a bad first impression of this, but once I saw further into what it was, THEN I could appreciate it.

For anyone who absolutely hates those G4TV shows, this one's a great parody of those. While this movie's not the best in the world, it's worth seeing at least once.

FarFromSubtle responds:

Thanks for watching dude!

Keep shooting for the stars!