Score: 8

"Not bad, but could be improved"

submission: Final Fantasy 7 -Remnant-

date: November 12, 2007

The animation is decent and the art style shows promise, especially given that it's created within Flash which can prove to be difficult for artists without as much talent.

My only real thing that kept bugging me about this is the fact that the dialogue was poorly done. I'm not talking about the voice recording quality or the voice acting (although I would recommend that in the future you recruit people in SBB via the Voice Actors club to cover some of these roles, because the same person doing all voices is tricky); instead, it's the way the dialogue was written. You had an interesting idea going on, but the dialogue, including the narration, sounded very stereotypical and comic-book-ish, which is a big turnoff to me personally (mostly when Hollywood does it, though). Even if the story is within a fantasy genre, dialogue should be written the way people would say it to each other.

To use an example, if Nanaki was attacked by a remnant of Sephiroth, you don't need 3 characters talking about it like that. Instead, improvise and show the attack happening, but leave the "remnant" idea to mystery for the characters to have to find out.

Two useful keys to screenwriting that I've found by analyzing the work of others is: 1) when it comes to dialogue, pretend you are the character speaking in that setting, and write what you would normally say if you were that kind of person in that kind of setting, and 2) when it comes to knowing what to and what not to show in your production, imagine yourself as a viewer going to the movies to see your film, and ask yourself all throughout your development: "If I was watching my own film as just an average viewer, what would -I- want to see? What would I want to see in this scene? What would I want to see overall?"

Just some food for thought. I usually don't review flashes because many flash artists can take an ounce of criticism, but the reason I felt compelled to review yours is because I can see a lot of potential that just needs some honing.

Good luck in your future endeavors.

Score: 5

"Hmm.."

submission: Bill Galah academy miniga

date: December 21, 2006

Maybe it's just my keyboard, but I could not move right or left, just up and down, so it half-defeated the purpose of playing the game.

It's a good practice at flash, but it's not really that great a game.

Score: 0

"........"

submission: Smashed.

date: December 10, 2006

I'm almost insulted that you used my music for this "thing" you call a movie.

Score: 10

"Very smooth animation"

submission: M.A.D 2 - The Icon Of War

date: December 7, 2006

This was very brilliantly animated as well as being a good public announcement.

I give you kudos.

Score: 6

"I agree with the guy who reviewed this before me"

submission: Lost Rhapsody 2

date: December 7, 2006

You have a natural talent for making flash movies. You artwork (excluding the characters, unless they're your original artwork too) is amazing, but even more amazing is your animating.

So, just why in the hell exactly did you do a Weird Al music video with that kind of talent? This is selling yourself short in the worst way.

I think I speak for everyone here at NG when I say, "We'd love for you to scrap stuff like this and start making original and serious movies. You have so much amazing potential. Please execute it right."

Score: 6

"Suprisingly not bad"

submission: Awesome Video Games - Ep2

date: November 28, 2006

I had a bad first impression of this, but once I saw further into what it was, THEN I could appreciate it.

For anyone who absolutely hates those G4TV shows, this one's a great parody of those. While this movie's not the best in the world, it's worth seeing at least once.